Three Haiku Wednesday-Tree House

Β© 2012 Michael Fiveson

 

the hours spent laughing

in this wonderful tree house

that you built for me

 

nobody told me

that one day it would just end

it was my escape

 

all my friends grew up

somehow I managed not to

stuck in adult skin

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60 thoughts on “Three Haiku Wednesday-Tree House

  1. Never had one either…but I live today on the sixth floor with a clear view of downtown Evanston IL…and many, many treetops. Still a kid…at heart!

    A fine shot, Mike…and thanks for giving me so much pleasure in reading your haikus!

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  2. I never had a tree house either (just reading through your comments). This makes me think I ought to build one. There’s no rule or law, as far as I know, that says adults can’t have a tree house.

    Enjoyed your haikus. Inspiring. πŸ™‚

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  3. Never had a tree house but my brothers uncovered this very deep hole in the ground behind our house and built walls around it, then built up one more room. Two stories with a basement! My parents were obviously oblivious to what they were doing. They just thought it was good ol’ boy fun to build a “hut.” When my dad came out to see it weeks later, he laughed. “That’s a hole to an old outhouse!” My mom tried to stop us from going into it but failed. It was a great “hut.”

    And I’d say something about the haiku, but I’m having too much fun living my childhood right now. I don’t want to attend to the adult skin. πŸ˜› (P.S. The haiku was thoughtful and made its point.)

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    • What a hoot you are. You guys played in an outhouse hole? I’d say ‘ewww’ but I don’t talk like that. But for you I’ll make an exception…….EWWWW!!!
      Well I guess that stuff decomposes huh.

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  4. I think we’re all stuck in adult skin. I don’t mind it so much as long as I can let my 13year old self out ocassionally. My wife doesn’t mind so much, contrary to the patronizing smiles I elicit from her whenever I do.

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    • Paul, I think you are a great guy. One of the things my wife loves about me is the boy that I am at my core. And I think we are probably alike, you and I.
      Thanks!

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  5. What a great “secret” place! I’d like to escape to a place like that too. I’ll never grow up. No. Nada. It’s too much fun not acting my real age. And age is just a number, anyway.
    I think part of not wanting to act matronly comes from teaching 5 yr olds for nearly 30 years! They know how to have fun! So Keep on playing! πŸ˜‰

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  6. Oh this is about me..i loved it. πŸ™‚
    trees were such a big part of my growing up..in fact some of the boys even called me monkey but that didnt deter me i used to spend so much time there day dreaming weaving stories,every kid should have a tree house and grandparents hugs..they are the best..
    beautiful post Mike loved it πŸ™‚

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  7. I might have written the first haiku like this:

    laughing hours
    this wonderful tree house
    you built for me

    ~~The idea in a haiku is a juxtaposition between two things…causing a sudden insight. Each one of yours have the elements for some pretty good stuff…

    I love that photograph!

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      • In Japan a haiku has 5/7/5 “on” or “onji” which are not quite the same thing as syllables… It’s quite impossible to write an English language haiku as the Japanese do (and even they stray from that form often.)
        English language haiku has taken on some very exciting and interesting forms lately… even a one liner… The idea is to keep it under 17 syllables if you can… 12 syllables is the best… but don’t count syllables. That’s not the idea. We keep it under 17 syllables in order to keep it from cramming too much stuff in it. The simpler the better (the words take on much more power that way.)
        A good haiku has the elements of insight…which as I mentioned before, often a juxtaposition of two things… I specialize in haiga which is an image and haiku dependent on each other to bring about the insight.
        I see you do have the feeling of keeping words to a minimum in your short poems. I’m glad you took no offense at my suggestion and I hope this is helpful. When I look through your photos I see so many sympathies that come into the writing of good haiku. Elegance, mystery, depth, Austere beauty, Beauty with the sense of loneliness. I see you find the juxtaposition of these weathered structures that mysterious mixture of beauty and its passing in age.

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  8. Thank you, You are very gracious indeed. I look forward to your posts. I came to haiku through art and so I’m an image person. I had to wade through a lot of stuff to get the hang of words… the minute I saw your photos I knew you have the soul of a haijin. Good luck.

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    • haijin (hiragana γ―γ„γ˜γ‚“)

      δΏ³δΊΊ: haiku poet
      廃人: cripple, disabled person

      I’ll go with the first definition. I heard everything you said to me last night and knew that correct haiku involved juxtapositions. I wanted to do that with today’s post but time did not permit it.
      You are a teacher?

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